Around 2:26 where it started getting "choppy" (for lack of a better word) was my favourite part. The whole thing had potential, actually, but sadly the beginning and especially the ending sounded out of key/discordant. Like I said, you certainly have potential, and I'd love to see you improve! To do that, you need to get the hang of both keys and mixing. Once you've done that, I see good things ahead.